children, family, inspiration, life, love, Parenting, poems, poetic challenges, Poetry, trust, writing 201
A child holds your hand, and
before she knows it, she’s
caught up in the steps and
doesn’t realize you’ve let go, so
easily she goes forward on her own.
And before you know it, she’s on a
bicycle, swaying, weaving,
caught up in the forward motion,
determined to ride without training wheels,
evidently unaware when you let go.
And it seems only too quickly, she gives up
bicycling, her third or fourth by now,
caring only to get behind the wheel,
driving with you as her instructor,
each lesson a little easier than the last.
From day one, you were there with her,
growing closer day by day,
her trust of you so complete.
It only seems natural,
judging by her successes, that you
know you’ve been there for her, and that you
love and trust her enough to let her go.
This is an acrostic variation about trust. The first three stanzas begin in succession, a-e; the last stanza’s format is f-l. The assignment also suggested internal rhymes. I played some with full rhyme, slant rhyme, assonance, and alliteration. What a fun challenge.
Ben Huberman said:
I loved how natural and conversational your voice here was — it worked really well, and gave me, as a reader, the brainpower to discover all the cleverness you invested in the form. Great use of the acrostic — I felt the “recycled” a-e structure (accompanying stanzas with so many visuals of cycles and wheels!) was a perfect fit to what you were saying. And you also knew exactly where to break the pattern.
Did I mention how much I enjoyed it? 🙂
P Moorman said:
Thank you for your comments. It means a lot that you not only took time to read it but liked it!
K E Garland said:
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